Tuesday, December 14, 2010

Final Writing

Literary Essay on The Old Man and the Sea by Ernest Hemingway

This novel has earned Ernest Hemingway the Pulitzer Prize for fiction in 1953 and played a major part in him winning the Nobel Prize for literature in 1954.1 The Old Man and the Sea is a short fiction novel, a narrative fable about an old fisherman on his quest to catch an enormous marlin in the Gulf of Mexico. Although it is very simply written and it is this American author’s last production, this literary piece of work regenerated Hemingway’s writing career. This novella was a huge success when it was released and it is still read by many nowadays. In the novel, the religious symbolism is very explicitly demonstrated as similarities between the life of the protagonist, Santiago, and occurrences of the life of Jesus Christ are presented through different literary elements such as characterization, Christian imagery and plot.
To begin, through the characterization of the main character, Santiago, an old fisherman who has become unlucky, similarities to Jesus Christ as well as similarities between their journeys are presented. First, Santiago never gives up and never feels defeated, even though he has spent eighty-four days without catching a fish and that his journey in the Gulf of Mexico is extremely painful. His determination is a virtue similar to Jesus Christ’s in the way that he also never gave up when he was tortured before his crucifixion. In addition, their journeys are similar because they are based on a need to be worthy of someone they looked up to. Santiago wants to catch a big fish in order to be worthy of the great DiMaggio, a baseball player to whom he looks up to. The role of DiMaggio for Santiago is similar to the role God played in the life of Jesus Christ as Jesus attempted to live up to God.
To continue, throughout the novel, Christian imagery is explicitly presented. First, Santiago is compared to Jesus being crucified as Hemingway describes his painful scream as «a noise such as a man might make involuntarily, feeling the nail go through his hands and into the wood»2. Also, at the end of his journey, Santiago is described carrying his mast up to his house as followed: «He started to climb again and at the top he fell and lay for some time with the mast across his shoulder. He tried to get up. But it was too difficult and he sat there with the mast on his shoulder and looked at the road. »3 This description reminds us of Jesus’s march to Calvary, the place where he was crucified, as he had to carry the cross.
Finally, the days of the week during which important actions take place in the novel correspond to the ones during which important events in the New Testament. First, Santiago succeeds in catching a fish after eighty-four days on a Friday, an event that could correspond to Good Friday, which is the day Jesus was crucified. Then, on the second day after he catches the marlin, Santiago prays while waiting anxiously for the marlin to rise to the surface in order for him to harpoon the fish. This corresponds to the second day after the death of Jesus, when his followers prayed while waiting for his resurrection. To finish, it is on a Sunday that the marlin finally rises and that Santiago is able to kill him. This victory corresponds to Easter Sunday, the day Jesus Christ rose from the dead.
In conclusion, through the novella The Old Man and the Sea, written by Ernest Hemingway, the religious symbolism is demonstrated efficiently through the protagonist’s personality and journey, through different examples of Christian imagery and through time in the plot that correspond to time in Jesus Christ’s life.

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Tuesday, November 2, 2010

A. Self-evaluation of Midterm test - 10%

«Discuss how Chopin uses irony effectively throughout the story»

                Have you ever been in a situation in which something happened when you expected the complete opposite? Similar phenomena occur throughout the short story «The Story of an Hour», in which the author, Kate Chopin, uses  explicit ironic elements effectively. In the story, the way Louise Mallard receives the news of her husband's death, the way she reacts to this information as well as the whole ending of this story demonstrates the irony.

                To begin, the way Louise is delivered the news of her husband's death is ironic once the ending of the story is known to the reader. First, at the beginning of the story, her friends take good care in  finding a way to give the woman the bad news as gently as possible, in order to avoid a harsh reaction, which could cause her to have a heart attack. However, in the end, they do not succeed in preventing an extreme reaction from Louise,  as she realizes that her husband is actually still alive. Indeed, Louise ironically dies of a heart attack as she sees the latter walk through the front door. Irony is present in this situation because the woman dies even though her friend tried to avoid it, and also because her death is due to the news contrary to the one they thought would give her a stroke. 

                To continue, the reaction of Louise to the tragic news of her husband’s death also demonstrates irony. While she secludes herself in her room and reflects upon her new and unexpected situation, Louise ends up reacting in a way that is opposite to a reaction that is usually considered normal in this kind of situation. Indeed, instead of feeling sad and sorrowful, she gradually feels  free and relieved in finding herself released from the oppression of her marriage and she realizes that her husband's death is actually a positive event that could lead to her repressed happiness. This reaction is not an expected one coming from a person who has just been informed of the death of someone close, especially in so short a period of time as the story occurs throughout a single hour. The fact that she discovers her future prospect happiness while grieving the loss of her husband is very ironic.
              
                Moreover, the third very ironic element is the whole ending of the story. First, Louise’s sister, thinks that if Louise stays in her room all alone, she would become ill, so she convinces her to come out with her. Just when she steps out of her room, Louise sees her husband entering the house. That event sets off Louise’s heart attack: the illness that kills her. The irony in this situation is the fact that Louise's sister wants to prevent her sister from having a sickness by making her leave her room, and that it finally causes her death. In addition, before dying, Louise just realizes she is going to be able to live fully for herself and that she is going to be happier and free. She believes a happy life is ahead of her. Unfortunately, she dies a few moments later, a situation that is ironic because she thinks a long life is awaiting her. In conclusion, all the examples above demonstrate clearly that in «The Story of an Hour», irony is effective, especially when Louise receives the bad news, her reaction that followed and the ending of the story. 

A. Self-evaluation of Midterm test - 10%

My purpose in writing the text is to prove to the reader that the author of «The Story of an Hour», Kate Chopin, uses irony effectively throughout this story.

I use this type of introduction: Question

This is a suggestion for improving the introduction or having a more effective one: To make sure the question is general enough for every reader to be able to respond and linking it fluently with the rest of the introduction.

In paragraph 1, the thesis statement or the main idea of the text is : «In the story, the way Louise Mallard receives the news of her husband's death, the way she reacts to this information as well as the whole ending of the story demonstrates the irony.»

This is a suggestion for improving the thesis statement or having a more effective one : Make sur it summarizes effectively my main supporting points, that it is contestable and that it is specific.

The topic sentence in -
paragraph 2 : «To begin, the way Louise is delivered the news of her husband's death is ironic once the ending of the story is known to the reader.» 
paragraph 3 : «To continue, the reaction of Louise to the tragic news of her husband’s death also demonstrates irony.»
paragraph 4 :«The third very ironic element is the whole ending of the story.»

The supporting points (paraphrased) I use in -
paragraph 2 are : Louise's friends took good care of announcing her husband's death to her in a gentle way so she would not have a heart attack, but they were not able to prevent her form having one when she learned that her husband was finally still alive.
paragraph 3 are : After the death of her husband, Louise realises that she will be happier without him, instead of feeling sad.
paragraph 4 are : Louise's sister thinks she will prevent her sister from becoming ill if she makes her come out of her room, but it is after doing so that she sees her husband still alive and dies of a heart attack.

I can add more detail in -
paragraph 2 by giving a quotation with my comments.
paragraph 3 by explaining more fully the distinction between what Louise feels when she hears of the death of her husband, and what a normal reaction should be.
paragraph 4 by quoting the last sentence : «When the doctors came they said she had died of a heart disease - of the joy that kills», which gives a perfect example of the irony illustrated in the story.

The transitional words or phrases I use in -
paragraph 2 are : «To begin», «First», «However», «Indeed», «and also»
paragraph 3 are : «To continue», «Indeed», «actually»
paragraph 4 are: «Moreover», «First», «In addition», «Unfortunately», «In conclusion»

The coordinating or subordinating expressions I use in -
paragraph 2 are : «once», «in order to», «as», «because», «even though», «and also» 
paragraph 3 are : «also», «While», «and», «as»
paragraph 4 are: «so», «Just when», «and»

Here is my suggestion for improving the conclusion : Make sure my conclusion summarizes my supporting points but is formulated differently than in the introduction.

I could improve the content of the text by giving more examples of irony and its effects in the story rather than only explaining the ironic situations.

I could improve the organization of the text by always making sur I have a sentence that summarizes all the supporting points of a paragraph at the beginning of it and by making sur I do not combine two different ideas in one paragraph.

I could improve the development of the text by offering more detail on the effect of irony in the story and by quoting relevant passages of the story as examples.

I could improve the sentence style of the text by :
1. «Sometimes in life, events occur that are not exactly or even sometimes the complete opposite of what we expect.» becomes
«Have you ever been in a situation in which something happened when you expected the complete opposite?» 
2. «What is ironic about this situation is the fact that she ends up having a heart attack even though her friends tried to avoid it, but it was because of the opposite information.» becomes
«Irony is present in this situation because the woman dies even though her friend tried to avoid it, and also because her death is due to the news contrary to the one they thought would give her a stroke.»
3. «While being in her room alone for consolation, Louise ended up realizing things that are the opposite of what would be a normal reaction.» becomes
«While she secludes herself in her room and reflects upon her new and unexpected situation, Louise ends up reacting in a way that is opposite to a reaction that is usually considered normal in this kind of situation.»


I could improve the vocabulary by (I rephrased most of my sentences, so I could not find single words I had changed)
1. «received the news...» becomes «is delivered the news...»
2. «being in her room alone» becomes «she secludes herself in her room»
3. «relieved by her being alone now» becomes «released from the oppression of her marriage»
4. «[realizes] that she will finally be happy» becomes «discovers her future prospect happiness»
5. «are not exactly or even sometimes the complete opposite» becomes «when you expceted the complete opposite»

I could improve the grammar by :
1. «her husband that perished» would have become «her husband who perished» ( I eliminated that part of the sentence in the second version.)
2. «a person that has» becomes «a person who has»
3. «has just got informed» becomes «has just been informed»
4. To correct all the innapropriate shifting between the present and the past tense, I changed the verbs with which I explained the story to the present tense.
5. «The way Louise Mallar receives the news of her husband's death and the way she reacts to this information, as well as the whole ending of the story...» becomes «The way Lousie Mallard receives the news of her husband's death, the way she reacts to this information  as well as the whole ending of the story...» (punctuation : the comma was incorrect.)

I could improve the spelling by ... (I had 10/10)

What I liked most about my first text is the ideas I found for my supporting points. They were specific, but detail could still be applied to them in order to reenforce them. They made the development of my paragraph easier.

What I liked least about my first text is the sentence style of my text. The sentences were written in an awkward way because I did not have the time to search for the exact words I meant to use to express my ideas. They were formulated in complicated and unclear ways.



Tuesday, September 7, 2010

Poe Paragraph

1. Compelling start (statistic/unusual, vivid example, brief description, paradoxical, quotation, question, analogy, joke/anecdote)

2. Topic sentence (writer's opinion, complete sentence, no «I think», no factual statement, not a direct question)

3. 3 ideas (note form)

Tuesday, August 24, 2010

Florianne

       The more I got to know her, the less we realised we had things in common and the more we understood we were completely different. But the more I got to know her, the more I got along suprisingly well with her.

        To start with a main aspect of her personnality, Florianne has travelling deap in her heart. To explore the world is part of the values with which she grew up. Born and raised for ten years in Calgary, she actually spent her last summer visiting her sister who has lived in Mexico for two years. She has also recently travelled in Europe with her brother, with whom she is very close. Her parents also share this taste for exploration: they both lived two whole years in Africa. She is the kind of person that feels at home nowhere, but that does not stop her from being happy and smiley.

         Presently, Florianne is starting a literature program which corresponds almost perfectly to her personnality. She is academically talented and has a facility to convince people and to express her opinions. She describes herself as a person who is constantly thinking about everything, reflecting on anything. Literature and politics is also part of her interests as well as music and dancing. Florianne has been dancing for seven years now, including two years in a «Sport-études» program at the «Collège de Montréal». She is a very talented classic ballet dancer and has even danced with the «Grands ballets canadiens» in the play «The Nutcracker».

      In conclusion, Florianne does not know what she wants to do in the futur or who she wants to become, but whatever she chooses, she will sureley succeed.